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Crit on 2 poses?

Postby Chama » Wed Apr 21, 2010 3:23 pm

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Just wanted to get HAAARSH picky critique on the pose on the right and the bottom. I'm already working on pixelling the top left one, and I see the little problems easily so I'll fix them as I work. The other two, I know there are tiny places that are off but I can't quite get them and I don't want to mess it up by overdrawing. I think the head might be too large on the right one? And the bottom one, HELPS on the feet, and the elbow joints on his arms look stiff or weird but I can't quite get it. Any help, redlining or just text critique would help and I'll use it when I start on them thanks ^O^

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Postby Rasberry » Wed Apr 21, 2010 8:01 pm

Holy crap!

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Postby Marleaux » Wed Apr 21, 2010 8:20 pm

You should have an edit of that one reaching out for something. By that one I mean the one laying down.
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Postby Sissors » Wed Apr 21, 2010 8:58 pm

The hand on the first one looks a little stiff/dead... perhaps just moving the arms down a little so the hands are supporting the head a little more? That way you wouldn't have to draw the hands at all! lol it's just that seems more natural for that sort of pose. I can't wait to see these!

And the feet on the bottom one look fine. :)
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Postby Chama » Wed Apr 21, 2010 9:27 pm

Rasberry~!! Thanks!! *waits for lines* ^O^

Ahh Marleaux, that's a great idea! I even thought about making one grumpily reading a book. I could make a couple edits of the lying one~

Sissors~ I think I fixed the stiffness in the first pose when I did the pixel lines a little bit ago. The first hand is resting -on- his head, and the other one is resting behind that hand, also on his head, and the pixels are a lot clearer in showing that so I think he should be okay :3 If he were supporting his head with his hands I would have needed to make his body lean back even more so *O* TOO MUCH WORKS AHAHA. But hopefully I got it to look more natural now.
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Postby Marleaux » Wed Apr 21, 2010 9:31 pm

I totally imagine someone on a harness, like...a purple haired diamond thief :|
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Postby zipple » Thu Apr 22, 2010 1:37 am

On the second one, his forearm is longer than his upper arm. That extra length also causes his hand to be in an awkward scratching-his-other-elbow position, whereas it would be more natural if his hand was wrapped around his ribs. Also, the thighs on this sketch are longer than the lower legs.
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Postby Chama » Thu Apr 22, 2010 3:15 am

zipple wrote:On the second one, his forearm is longer than his upper arm. That extra length also causes his hand to be in an awkward scratching-his-other-elbow position, whereas it would be more natural if his hand was wrapped around his ribs. Also, the thighs on this sketch are longer than the lower legs.


:B sfkjsdgribnbnmcvb!!! I noticed the arms were both strange and re-sketched them, but I couldn't figure out what else was so off about it~~!! It's the leeeeegs, THANK YOU 8DD
My reference for that pose (a muscular guy model in Poser 6 hahahaha) was at a slightly above angle so I could tell what was going on in certain areas, and I kept angling it back and forth and I must have ended up drawing the legs in an above perspective because I'm smart :B NOW I KNOW WHAT TO FIX, THANK YOUuuUuuuu and his head won't seem so big anymore if the legs stretch out his body size hahah
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Postby Chama » Sat Apr 24, 2010 2:05 am

PROGRESS?
Legs look better? And I changed the arms altogether. They were just really awkward and too hard for me to do so many hands and arms so close together on this size of a base :B

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